Summary Draft 1 - Autonomous Vehicles

In the article "Singapore revs up engine for autonomous vehicles race" Noble (2019) reports on how Singapore is trying to keep up and compete with other countries on incorporating driverless vehicles into their transportation system. This is evident, as Noble (2019) mentions how multiple organizations in Singapore are collaborating on implementing the Technical Reference (68), which targets to bring about safety towards incorporating driverless vehicles. At the same time, Noble(2019) shares how countries like Germany and Korea have already begun conducting test and research outside of test sites to enhance further and improve the development of autonomous vehicles. Despite Singapore showing progress over the years in their efforts to incorporate driverless vehicles, they are still not on par with other countries and lags behind. Based on development-wise, Singapore is still within the primary stages of development as compared to other countries who are already working on in their secondary or tertiary stages.

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  1. Jantzen Lee21 September 2019 at 09:59

    Hi Raj,

    Well done on summary draft 1. I think it is a well written summary. Here are some suggestions that you can see to take your summary to the next level :

    1. Quoting the article ,"Singapore revs up engine for autonomous vehicles race",

    2. Rephrasing of certain terms like "trying to keep up and compete" to "pursuing and competing" to make your summary flow better.

    3. Main key pointers you can link it back to the thesis statement making it a stronger summary.

    4. Summary has proper structure and correct use of verbs and grammar. Good Job!

    I have made amendments on the article. You can find it in the link below
    https://gofile.io/?c=o5t3WN

    All the best on writing draft 2! Lets try our best and strive to do well! If you have any questions or areas that requires clarification, you know where to find me!

    Yours Sincerely
    Jantzen Lee

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  2. Nazirul Matin22 September 2019 at 08:31

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  3. Nazirul Matin22 September 2019 at 08:53

    Hey Raj,

    Good effort for summary draft 1. Your main claim has been conveyed well at the start of the summary. Although, I feel that there are a few pointers that could improve your summary draft. For instance, some of your secondary points is pretty redundant as it does not relate back to your thesis statement. Also, I feel that certain points might need more elaboration to let the reader understand the point you're stating well. Apart from that, it is perfect that you restate the thesis statement at the end and overall the summary draft is well written!

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